Saturday, October 30, 2010

Fruit Salad

            I have no sight just taste and smell to describe a rainbow to you.  My famous fruit salad:
with red-ripened pieces of apple mixed with mandarin orange slices.
Both juicy to the pallette.
Next sun yellow bannanas mixed with perfected kiwi slices.
Mingled with brilliant blue berries and bright purple grapes.
Layer upon layer of colors similar to that of what a rainbow infuses.

2 comments:

  1. Mel, I agree, the last line needs a little changing. I like the line "Both juicy to the palette." Here "palette" can have an ambiguous meaning.

    Yummy.

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  2. Mel,
    Sorry I was so slow to respond. I know we discussed this at writing class today. It's a great poem but could be expanded on a bit. Great job, this beats mine by a mile!

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