Debbie, Ruth was clever to figure out the haiku-like qualities of this poem. It is zen in its core. Economy of language is often so hard to force, and I think this must have just come to you. The rhyming works here, but my favorite pairing is with the picture and the words. It seems to me that this depression may have a light at the end of it. No? What about doing a number of these micro burst poems and pairing them in a collection?
That is a wonderful idea. THis one just came to me when I was trying to fall asleep one night. I always keep a notebook by the bed for such emergencies! Thanks so much! Debbie
Is this a haiku, including the title? 5-7-5 syllables?
ReplyDeleteNo-just free-style! Debbie
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ReplyDeleteRuth was clever to figure out the haiku-like qualities of this poem. It is zen in its core. Economy of language is often so hard to force, and I think this must have just come to you. The rhyming works here, but my favorite pairing is with the picture and the words. It seems to me that this depression may have a light at the end of it. No? What about doing a number of these micro burst poems and pairing them in a collection?
That is a wonderful idea. THis one just came to me when I was trying to fall asleep one night. I always keep a notebook by the bed for such emergencies! Thanks so much! Debbie
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